The Official Writing Challenge
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Having recieved a similar phone call, I can attest that it's the last thing anyone ever wants to hear!

An easy fix--some of your dialog is incorrectly punctuated. Instead of...

Stop worrying. Daddy said.

...the punctuation mark before the end quotes should be a comma:

Stop worrying, Daddy said.

(note that if you've used a question mark or exclamation point, you can keep those the way they are).

So glad for the happy ending!
Nice job of MCing the story. Your action felt very real and pulled me into the story right away.