The Official Writing Challenge
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Lovely - and I love the ending - well done and well written.
Powerful! This story tugged on my heart's strings! Great job!
Good job!
This is beautiful. Your descriptions of the people on the bus and the stop for the bus to be cleaned out etc en route were good too, although took up a lot of the valuable 750 words. Well done with a great entry.
Nice job! I agree that the descriptions were great and drew the reader into the story. Be careful to save room enough to develop the end as well as you developed the beginning; 750 words gets used up quickly! Good work! Blessings, Cheri