The Official Writing Challenge
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I like this very much. The first verse would be a good way for children to learn the order of creation. The alliteration in the second verse as well as repetition in the first make it a good read-aloud poem.
06/11/07
My favorite is verse two, as I'm a lover of word play. Wonderful!

Take a look at the 4th line of the 2nd stanza for a quick fix if you submit this elsewhere.

I'd love to see that 2nd verse illustrated with rich, vibrant colors and crowds of animals.
06/11/07
Fantstic! I love that you have embraced the message of God's creation, in a way that is perfect young minds.
06/11/07
I like the thought "day was born" and I like the repeat of "It's good". It would be fun to see an illustration of the 2nd half of your poem with all the animals! I'm sure a child would enjoy looking at all the pictures while the poem is being red. The title is perfect.
06/12/07
This is really beautiful. It makes me imagine the Earth the way God originally created it and intended it to be. Very colorful images!
06/12/07
Oh, I just LOVE the second section especially! I can see that illustrated just beautifully, maybe even as an alphabet book. Just lovely, fun and delightful.
06/13/07
I agree with comments above. This would be a great illustrated book, where kids get an appreciation of the not-so-common as well as well-known animals. Your love for God's creation comes through loud and clear. Well done.
Children love poems. The second verse is so much fun with the animals in alphabetical order. Very creative.
Very readable for children.