The Official Writing Challenge
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Excellent story! I loved the imagery in this one--my favorite descriptions were "hair the color of orange sherbet," "patchwork colored cat," "white cotton hair," and especially "screaming thighs." That one sounds totally original, and I could feel the pain of it!

Might like to see the story open with a specific decription of Lynda's shoes beside her bed, or something else to do with walking that would tie in later on.

I really liked the twist of the dog walking program's volunteer coordinator knowing who Lynda was and already caring about her!
Your description of the absolute physical weariness of depression was spot on, and I love so many of your touches--the sherbet-colored hair and matching cat, the snippet of dialog about promising to return the dog...and I loved the little twist at the end, when the elderly woman turned out to also be a volunteer. Just so many lovely touches here. Very tender and touching.
Good visuals. This story, as helping others, leaves one with a good feeling throughout. Keep writing.
Great "on topic" story - Volunteer meets Volunteer. Nicely done.
Great twist - and I love your description. I definitely enjoyed this piece!
Wow! This is some good writing. This is a fantastic piece! It's a blessing to read with layers of messages. Kudos Jen - you nailed this one good! ;)
Very smartly done. The layering of different volunteer stories was awesome. It held my attention and didn't disappoint. Thoroughly enjoyable.
Very, very nice. This is touching and heartwarming. Well done. Thanks for sharing this.