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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: SOUL / SOLE (03/02/23)
It Is Well

I had been walking for what seemed like hours. The soles of my feet felt like they were on fire. I badly needed to sit down.

As I neared the edge of town I spotted an elderly lady sitting in a rocker on her front porch. As I got closer I heard the lady saying-to me, “you looked exhausted, come sit a spell with me and have a nice cold glass of tea”.

“You are a blessing for my tired old feet, so yes I would love to sit and have a glass of tea. The soles of my feet hurt so bad I don’t think I could walk another step,” I replied. I used the rail to pull my self up the steps to the porch. As I eased down into that well used rocking chair, I heard “It is well with my Soul” being sung on the little portable radio that sat on the table between the rockers. Uncontrollable tears started running down my cheeks.

The nice lady, who I found out later was Ruth, asked “What is it dear, why are you so sad. What has broken your heart so badly?”

When she talked she reminded me of my mom in a strange kind of way. “My moms not doing so well right now and her favorite song was just playing on your radio. I’m sorry it just all caught me off guard. My mom gets me to play that song on our old piano all the time. She tells me don’t be sad, when Jesus comes for me, it truly is well with my soul.” I said.

Changing the subject, I asked Ruth,
“are you new in town, I have never seen you around here before”

“Yes, I have only been here for a few weeks. I am here looking for someone very dear to me. I was told a story about a lady, that lived in this idyllic little town, and have high hopes it might be her.,” Ruth answered.

I have lived here in Swannonoa my whole life, but I have been in Asheville for the past several months taking care of my mom, she moved there a few years ago. I was just coming over to pick up a few things from my house, my car broke down a few miles down the road. So What is your friends name? Maybe I can help I asked.

Ruth hesitated, “Her name is Rosie. I haven’t seen her since I was 3, she is my twin. When we were little we were camping over in Maggie Valley. I am sure you know where that is. Just over the mountain.
Well here is the story I have been told my whole life. We had gone to the boathouse in the middle of the night when someone grabbed Rosie and took off. All of a sudden we heard tires squealing, no one could make out what model or color the car was, because it was pitch black. Everyone in the campground searched for Rosie all night and there was a search party looking for months up in the area. They never found any sign of her.”

I got chill bumps all over me when I heard Ruth’s story. Could this really be happening after so many years. “Ruth I think I may have the answer to who you are looking for,” I said

Ruth listened intently as I talked about my mom and my grandmother. I told her that my grandmother was not really my grandmother but she raise my mom since she was very little. My grandmother and grandfather found her out in the woods. They said she was near death and wouldn’t speak a single word, when she did finally talk she didn’t even remember her name , so my grandmother named her Ruby. They tried to found who she belong to but kept hitting road blocks so they loved her as their own..

Ruth, I think my mom might be your twin. You look so much like her, I thought it was just a coincident when I first saw you, but I have pictures, I believe will prove that you are my moms twin.

Ruth started to cry, “I never gave up believing she was alive. Can we go see her, we can take my car. As they started down the road “it is well with my soul”
came on the radio. Ruth grabbed her nieces hand and said it certainly is.
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Jennifer Percell 
03/09/23
Very nice job! Would love to see the story expanded when more words were allowed. God gives those miracles all the time!
Bonnie Clarkson
03/10/23
Very good job. "pull myself up by the rail" is very good picture. Most of what I saw was minor grammar mistakes like "moms versus Mom's and a comma after a phrase (but grammar rules change and that may be one of them). I had an editor tell me that dialogue without contractions sounded odd. Read it aloud and judge for yourself. Keep writing.
Avigail David
03/11/23
Good job with the topic sole-soul in this gripping story. You caught my attention through to the end. I enjoyed the active voice in the entire story.

Just tinny-winny edits. Besides that, all good!

Blessings!
Barbara Culler 
03/14/23
That is one of my favorite songs! Good story!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
03/16/23
This is an awesome story. You pulled me in right away. You need to proofread before you submit and maybe brush up on your punctuation rules, especially the ones with quotation marks, punctuation, and capitalization. I really enjoyed the dialog and some tweaking could make it a bit more realistic. You've an awesome foundation here. And I see quite a bit of natural storytelling in this interesting read.