The Official Writing Challenge
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03/02/23
A good message. I wanted to play clarinet at one time, but eventually settled on a couple years of piano.
03/02/23
Several good things here. I like the comparisons to learning the language of music. You have strong arguments for reading the Word that hold up as truth. I like your return to the opening thoughts in your conclusion too.
03/05/23
This was an interesting read.

It would be easier on the eyes if there was more spacing between the paragraphs.


I really enjoyed this. You did an excellent job of writing on both words without it feeling like it was two different articles. My one suggestion would be not to overexplain things to your reader. Give a quick explanation, but maybe not a detailed definition of woodwinds is needed. I'd also suggest you double space between paragraphs. You have a wonderful message. You also gave a real life example that many people can relate to and delivered a message that is needed in the world today.