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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: Allowed - Aloud (01/05/23)
Those Three Letters

The room became deathly quiet, as everyone turned and looked at me. I suddenly realized I had spoken aloud the one phrase that was never allowed to come out of our mouths at Holy Cross school. Not only had I said it, I had said it loud enough for everyone in the room to hear.

I knew I was in trouble as I saw Sister Ruth coming across the sanctuary . “Follow me” she whispered as she walked in front of me.
I stepped in behind her, quickly taking my ear buds out. Thankfully no one had noticed them in my ears; or had they?

What was so wrong with those 3 little letters, it’s not like it’s a crime, oh wait a minute it kinda is here; and trust me it’s like a death penalty crime. I felt like I was walking to the guillotine.
Sister Ruth’s every step showed she was on a mission to get me into some serious trouble with the Rev Mother. She was walking so fast and heavy footed that every step sounded like an angry judge pounding his mallet on the podium.

My mind was racing, what would my parents do if I was not allowed to come back to school. They both had graduated from Holy Cross and wanted me to do the same. Surely I wouldn’t be expelled for saying 3 little letters.

I was shown a chair just outside of Rev Mothers office, with instructions to wait there. Sister Ruth, being ever so ready to spill the beans about what had just happened entered the office.

I sat there praying that I would not have to tell them I had been talking to my boy friend on the phone (another big no-no).
I just got so excited about being ask to the senior prom and said aloud the forbidden 3 letters, that one little phrase. My boyfriend Sam went to public school and going to the prom was a huge deal to us that went to Catholic school.

Suddenly I snapped out of my thoughts into reality when I heard the squeaky door to Rev Mothers office open. I was so nervous I could hardly breath.

Sister Ruth announced “ Rev Mother will see you now.” She turned and started back to the sanctuary, boy was I glad to see her leave. Facing one at a time was quite enough.

As I walked in, Rev Mother said “have a seat” never looking up at me. It was so quiet
you could have heard a pin drop. “Well Julie Ann what do you have to say for yourself ” ask Rev Mother.

“I just got so excited and blurted out the first thing that popped in my heard, not thinking about being in the sanctuary” I replied.
Finally looking at me she asked me what was so exciting about being in the sanctuary that would make me react like that.

I just sit there twisting my hair not knowing how to answer her. “Julie Ann, did you hear my question” she asked? “Yes Rev Mother” I replied still not answering her question.

Then she asked me “Would it have anything to do with those things you pulled out of your ears when Sister Ruth walked over to you? I think y’all call them ear buds.”

My heart sank, I was really in trouble now, might as well tell the whole truth and get it over with. “I’m sorry Rev Mother I was talking to my boyfriend, which I know is also not allowed. He texted me and said he had to ask me something and could I call him so I did and he ask me to go to the prom. I was so excited that’s when I shouted OMG yes!” I explained.

Rev Mother looked at me and said “From now on keep your phone in your locker while at school.”

Then to my surprise the Rev Mother started to laugh and said, “If I was 17 and my boyfriend called and ask me to the senior prom ( it is the senior prom right) I would have been excited enough to call on God too.”
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Linda Lawrence 
01/12/23
Wow! I love this! So well-done! I'm still laughing.
Arlene Baker
01/13/23
This story has SOOOO much potential. The surprise ending is priceless.

To make your writing pop, learn to show emotion rather than explain it. This grabs the reader's attention, via emotion, and holds it to the end.

Your creativity is great. I enjoyed the laugh at the end.
Terry R A Eissfeldt 
01/16/23
Good bones of a great story. Don't be afraid to edit, edit, edit. Read it aloud (pun intended) Read one line at a time covering the rest (this helps me to see the small mistakes that my mind with correct automatically when I read) Thanks for sharing
Blessings
Marlene Custer 
01/18/23
Great story! I, too, would encourage you to have someone read over your writing and help you correct punctuation and a couple other little things.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
01/19/23
Oh I love this. You included both words and they were both the central theme to the story. With some tweaking you've an awesome middle grade short story. If you ever want to try to publish it, get a professional editor and I'd be happy to give you a great discount. Children's stories are my favorite genre so this is the highest compliment I could give someone. It's simply brilliant and once more I find myself saying an all-time favorite!