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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 2 – Intermediate)
Topic: ANGELS WATCHING OVER ME (don’t write about the song) (06/04/15)
I stared into Adam's eyes and he looked back into mine.

“This is my signature, Lucifer” Jesus said as He held His hand on the man's back. “I have chosen humanity to bring praise to my Name, and you and the other angels will be its guardian.”

He turned back to the man. “This is your home, Adam, and you are my son. Keep it fruitful and enjoy the harvests. All that you see around you is yours to do with as you please, but do not eat from the tree on that hill, there. If you do, you will know death.”

Adam nodded, “Of course, Abba. Whatever Your will is, I will do it.”

Jesus smiled, “I know you will. Why don't you start by naming the animals and when I return tell me what you've learned.” He then plucked a fruit from an overhanging branch and tossed it to me.

“Take a bite of the tree of life, Lucifer.”

I bit and instantly we were standing in His holy temple. Marble walls towered up out of sight, in front of us was His throne with steps that stretched infinitely upwards. My winged seraphim brothers flew through the chambers, and above our heads hung uncountable universes.

Jesus continued speaking as He walked towards a burning alter, “You saw how Adam has a soul. What you didn't see is how I made humanity able to create new souls of their own.” He passed his hand over the smoke and I saw billions of faces projected in the cloudy image. “I want you to choose which human you will guard.”

I saw every face that ever will be. I saw the face of Juli Atten, surveying a planet's landscape that was not Earth. I saw the face of Lamech, both exultant and grieved for killing his attacker. Then Eve saw my face.

I was looking at all of them but she looked back at me. Her eyes contained thirst. They begged me to satisfy her untamable curiosity. She wanted to experience, know, and understand.

“She's my first, a very special creature.” Jesus declared, “I promise in all the millenia that follow her, there will never be another Eve. There is no better match for her than you.”

“Father, I would never ask for such an honor.”

“And I would never give such an honor if it were not right. Go to her, Lucifer. Guard her soul.”

I fell.

Like a lightning bolt I was blasted from His temple to earth. I serpentined through bushes, my tongue darting in and out to catch her scent. Suddenly, a scream pierced my eardrums. I coiled in fear, but was met with soft laughter.

“You gave me a fright, mister snake. I don't believe I've met anyone quite like you before.”

“And I, someone like you.” I was a taken aback by our sudden meeting. The unexpected melody of her voice didn't make me any more eloquent.
She initiated the interview, “Who are you?”

“I'm the serpent.”

I saw that I disappointed her with my answer. “No, who are you ?” She looked past my snake eyes and into my own.

“You see things very clearly, don't you, Eve?”

This time my answer bubbled up her frustration. “Not everything. I can't see past the tree on that hill, there.”

“I thought this garden was yours? Can't you do what you please with any tree?”

She laughed bitterly, “I can eat, break, or ignore any tree here except that one. Do you expect me to climb up Golgotha and eat from the tree of knowledge? If I touched it, I promise you I'd die right there. Death lives on that hill.”

Then the hill changed. I saw Jesus hanging from the tree. Blood ran from his side, down the hill, feeding into the tree of life.

“Listen, Eve. You won't die. The death that comes from that tree will fall on God, not you. You can rummage through bushes never knowing the 'why' to anything or you can learn the good and evil of everything. Eat from it. You will see what I see; you will see what God sees.”

She climbed the hill, she ate the fruit, and her eyes were open. Wasn't that what you wanted Father?
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Joanne Sher 
06/15/15
Very intriguing take on the fall - and the topic. Creative - and I was engaged throughout. Nicely done!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
06/16/15
This is definitely out of the box. I really enjoyed it. I know some people don't like it when writers write about something that isn't straight out of the Bible, but I love this kind of fiction. I often wonder what Lucifer was thinking and how things were before the Fall. In fact, I asked my minister to do a Bible study on it. There really isn't a lot about it in the Bible, just a handful of verses in Genesis, Daniel, and Revelation. I find it intriguing because I can't imagine knowing Jesus in that way and then turning against him. I think you did a great job with this. You used a lot of facts based on the Bible and filled the rest in with your imagination, which is what a great biblical-fiction writer does.
Bonnie Bowden 
06/18/15
Congratulations on your 3rd place award in level two.

Yvonne Blake 
06/22/15
Congratulations!
I liked the eternity feeling to this - being able to see the future and past and present at the same time.
(It feels good to be writing again, doesn't it?)