The Official Writing Challenge
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03/07/05
This poem is adorable. It reminded of Dr. Seuss. very clever and fun.
03/08/05
I enjoyed this immensely. I heard about this incident also, and I felt just a little bad smiling through your poem at the tragic event. Good flow and fun rhyming words. Nice job.
03/08/05
Very funny. We tear up the humans too (with words) when we see that cake pass us by.
I loved your sing-song poem! This would be a great commercial pitch (except for the killing part, of course). Imagine the ad for "Betty Crocker" cake mix. I can see the crumbs flying now!!!
03/09/05
Very cute! I great lesson woven in a seriously, humorus verse. - Nancy
A delightful read and maybe a good reminder to know there are true dangers about not thinking of others...
03/12/05
Brilliant! Based on an earlier comment, this was true? You have a tremendous ability with words - keep using your gift, won't you!
03/14/05
An important lesson here told in humorous verse with a tragic ending. You have a wonderful gift of using poetry to tell your story and make your point.