The Official Writing Challenge
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One tiny concern: How did he get the book back from his uncle? I think "she was being drug" should be "she was dragged". Other than that bit of pickiness, this is a wonderful story. Great job.
Very good story, well told. GOod job
Tim, I'm so glad you won! Congratulations, it is well-deserved. (I hope other FW's will visit your neat website!)

One thing I would have liked is some clue about the fate of this precious mother. Maybe I'm dense, but was she executed?

God bless you! Your'e on your way up!
Congratulations, Tim! This is a well-deserved win. You certainly know how to pull a reader right into your story. Dynamite writing--God bless you.