The Official Writing Challenge
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This is quite lovely. The opening paragraph was great. It grabbed my attention immediately. You did an excellent job of picking the right Scripture and focusing on just one verse while sharing how it fit your life. My only suggestion would be to avoid exclamation points. Let your words do your exclaiming. The poem was lovely too. You nailed the topic and delivered a clear message.
I liked the unique way you introduced your poem. It helped pull us into your message of hope through poetry in a special way. Please know I'm not what you would call a poetry lover but I truly enjoyed this one. Thank you for sharing it. You're a talented writer.

Just one thing I stumbled over was the ending of the first sentence in the 2nd paragraph, where you wrote. "...her only solace since long." Since I'm not familiar with the craft of poetry, I'm not sure what happened there or the meaning. But felt I should let you know how it broke the flow for me. But other than that ... well done!