The Official Writing Challenge
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Sounds like you've given a lot of yourself over the years.
11/09/19
This sounds like the way church used to be when I was much younger! You serve well.
11/09/19
Thank you for all the "generous" service you give to your church and community. It might help to break your article into a few more small paragraphs; it may also be easier to read and group different ideas together. Try finding an editing partner...I have one, and she blesses me continually, and we have become good friends.
11/09/19
This really shows how you've given a lot over the years.

I think it would have been better to choose one of these things and told a story about how it ended up blessing you and others. For example, maybe singing in the choir. Add some dialogue. Give us one whole story, rather than just a list of things you've done.

Great job being on topic.