The Official Writing Challenge
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I could feel the pain of the red heels. They would bother me too. I wasn't sure where your story was going...I kept looking for something related to the topic. You missed punctuation in many places. In one paragraph, you had two people speaking. Each person gets their own line.

You tried very hard-it's evident in the detailed story you crafted. Keep writing.
This was such a touching and hauntingly beautiful story. I felt the MC's pain at the thought of losing her leg to cancer as she struggled in the red high shoes.

It made me think about her pain and feel it. Well done.

I liked that there is so much hope in the end with the "new boyfriend" taking the reins, knowing it was the beginning of a very strong and solid relationship.

Well done.

Your title drew me in. I would like a pair of red shoes just not high heels.

I think your entry would have been much higher if it focused around the topic, zenith.

Congratulations on placing 3rd place in the Intermediate category.
Congratulations on 3rd Place!