The Official Writing Challenge
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With some rhythm and perhaps a tightened rhyming scheme, this would be a very nice poem! Thanks for sharing!
12/07/05
You painted a nice picture here, and I can see this as a children's book. I'm not sure about the "sight / blight" couplet, though. Trees do sometimes get ill and die, as do people, but we are still watched by God. I like the word "lovefeast," very pretty.
I wonder if you can re-enter it in the next challenge? Keep writing!