The Official Writing Challenge
This article has been read 454 times
Member Comments
Member
Date
08/28/14
Powerful! Amazing message, and so touching in content.

God bless~
Great poem. I am not a poet and couldn't write one if my life depended on it. You, however, are very talented in poetry.
09/02/14
Nicely done. Good message.
I really liked the direction of your poem. It was full of emotion and pain.

I would like to see you add one more stanza about forgiving the one that did the hurting. When this takes place healing can begin to take place.

I tried to think of a word that would rhyme with "flow" to replace "brow" but didn't. The tears would probably not be on the brow.

I like your diligence in working on the line length to make for easy reading and also finding the rhyming words.

Very good.