The Official Writing Challenge
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I enjoyed this unfinished poem and would love to know the ending to it. Good job and very well written.
This brought tears to my eyes. I could feel the poignancy (sp?) in it. Thanks for sharing.
Thanks for sharing your unfinished poem. It touched a lot of places in my memory banks and in my heart.
I liked your use of parallelism w/ the 2 time-frames. Providing the backstory at the beginning was helpful. I think you missed a word ("new") in that part--unless "totally event" is another use of teenage lingo. :) Nice job.
i love the wrapped up interwined feeling in this poem. the young lady wrapped up in the conversation, you observing and yet also enfolding her with your care and i think the poem is complete in itself it does not feel unfinished. such a very clever and original idea.... maybe going to be a winner.
you wrapped me up in the poem too. I have a 16yr old daughter almost 17 who knows what will unfold in 20 years time.I think so many people will identify with this snapshot of a moment
good on you!
This is so beautiful. I hope you read it at her wedding. Congratulants on your Highly Commended.