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It is so hard to be a teenager... peer pressure and temptation at every turn. You showed the inner conflict of your MC very well.
Well done for showing us the emotional battle within. I liked this story.
Very moving. I felt like I was her and fortunately for me, my teenage experience was a lot more stable. Wonderful writing.
I liked the emotions in this story. There were some tense changes (past to present) in the beginning. Watch for those when you write. I also enjoyed the descriptions of the setting. It was very vivid.
I like the story and made me want to more about the MC and her future.
Great writing. The story was well set. I especially liked the phrasing at the end--the pigeons watched her innocence pass by.
This was a cool story, I want to read the novel!
Wow, this is beautifully written. Your title is awesome. Your ending has quite an impact. The MC's longings for love and security have clearly been identified and described. It's so sad that many of our teenagers gave in to peer pressures like this. Thanks for such an insightful writing.