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Topic: Inner Strength (04/20/06)
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TITLE: A Day in the Life | Previous Challenge Entry
By Jody Goode
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ADD TO MY FAVORITES
Fear strikes and grips my heart
What will happen to me this day?
I awake for this new day
The Lord is near as He has promised, forever and for always
What is it You have for me this day?
Off to work, that dreary place
Where people chat and gossip
Where no work is accomplished
At such a blazing pace
Lord, You know me best of all
And placed me where I can serve You as You call
To soothe the hearts of those in sorrow
To bring blessing upon tomorrow
Doing time for but a pittance
Don’t I deserve a little more?
My boss is cheap and shows no patience
As I slave away to do his chore
The work I do, I do for You
As to God and not to man
For if I don’t You’ll see right through me
At this day’s end, I will to stand
Home again and oh so lonely
No one here to share my grief
I close my eyes to sleep
Only to wake the demons deep inside
Fear strikes and grips my heart
No one here, my soul to keep
Now I lay me down to sleep
I pray the Lord, my soul to keep
If I should die before I wake
I pray the Lord my soul to take*
(*Final verse an 18th century children's prayer)
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I really liked the second to last stanza. Beautifully stated and packs a punch. I could even see that one stanza leading to a story. Think about it.
Good work.
And great encouragement on how to "be a living sacrifice" and do it as unto the Lord! May God bless you with HIS abundant grace in your coming in and in your going out and in the midst of the "valley". Makes me think of both Joseph and David and how their faithfulness in serving in the little things, "taught" them to be mighty and powerful rulers God could trust with much more ...Occupy til I come. Advance O Mighty One in the making!!!
It would be even more effective to take the rhythm and rhyme scheme of the "Now I lay me..." poem and use them in the rest of the poem. A few minor adjustments could accomplish that.
Good job!