The Official Writing Challenge
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11/14/14
Thanks for sharing, I found this to be an interesting read, and I appreciated the ending, that's when your heart truly spoke volumes.

God bless~
This article has the potential to be an excellent travelogue. The descriptions of the retreat are wonderful and the tone warm. Could be even more specific to the genre if written in the second person (as if inviting or enticing a guest there) and toning down the backstory a bit. Good job!
11/16/14
Thanks for sharing your travel story - I thoroughly enjoyed reading it, and you brought the setting of the place to life. The repeated references to "sans kids" was hilarious - great job on this one!
11/20/14
Congrats!
God bless~
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