The Official Writing Challenge
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12/16/17
My favorite line was: In a lightning bolt, Spirit meets matter.

The first stanza repeated many of the same kinds of thoughts. I would also remove the word, "very."
Your topic thoughts changed some from Holy Spirit to Jesus and then to Christians. I didn't feel a transition though when the change was made.

You did have good thoughts though.
12/22/17
Congratulations on your 2nd place finish in the Beginners category, Kari.