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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: OVERLOAD (10/06/16)
I cried out aloud to the Lord
He heard my cry
I hid not my weaknesses
Neither my faults
For they are ever before me

I do not want to stumble
Neither fall
But my heart was sick with grief
Years of toiling
Slaves to hard hearts
Why do they resist the Holy Spirit?

I continued my lament before the Lord
My distress was very great indeed
Groans uttered
No words
Burdens
Too great for my soul

Yet

I hid not back my tears before Him
Neither my own failures
For the enemy compounded my heart against me
'I cannot do this again LORD!'

He knew
My familiar plight of old
No words were needed
He knew me before I was conceived
He understood from the foundation of the earth

For the Lord's sufferings cannot be compared to mine

Yet

He poured His compassion
His mercies upon me
He lifted up my weak and feable knees
Strength poured
From Him
For He is more than able

Strength to continue
Strength to love
Strength to forgive
Strength to walk another day
Not mine own will Lord

But in Him who is able
In Him who died and rose again
Nothing is too hard

For it is written

'We are more than conquerors'
The present sufferings do not compare to the glory that shall be revealed

Yet

To Him whose eyes see everything
To Him who hears the cries of his children
True and Faithful is His Name

For where can I go from His Spirit?
Where can I flee?
He is ever before me
He is ever beside me
For today
He changed not
Neither will He ever change

My burdens now
No more
The future in Him secure
Truly Jesus is my Lord
My Saviour

Though the trials continue
In Him I must remain

For it is written

'I am the True Vine
Without Me you can
Do nothing'
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Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
10/14/16
This is a powerful piece. I could definitely relate to the lament. I've been doing a bit of that myself today, and you reminded me God is there right beside me, hearing every cry, feeling the splash of my tears. The only red ink is I wanted to say nor when you wrote neither. It disrupted the flow a tiny bit for me, but the fault is mine. (Experts can't even agree if nor can be used without neither). I might do it this way: I hid neither my weaknesses nor my faults. Of course that might mess up the rhythm, and I understand UK and US rules can vary. I think using the repetition was perfect. It brought the message home and also allowed the reader to sense what is coming next (which I like in poems, but am not a poem expert). I think this has hope, faith, and strength in it and it spoke clearly to me tonight.
Larry Whittington
10/16/16
Poetry is a very good and effective way of releasing feelings, whether of anguish or joy. The release brings peace.

Well express anguish. Well express peace through the hope given in God's word.

Keep your heart in heaven and your eyes in his word.
Loni Bowden-Horn 
10/21/16
Jackie, Congratulations on your 2nd place win in the beginners level.

This piece was so expressive at the wide range of emotions we go through when we lament.

Nicely written
Loni Bowden-Horn 
10/21/16
Sorry--Jacky instead of Jackie