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11/14/13
I think you nailed the topic, questioning the accuracy of what we see as we look into the goldfish bowl. The rhymes are quite creative. My favorite: "Privacy others will invade. Past and present on promenade." Nice work.

11/14/13
WOW -Powerful piece! Loved it.

God bless~
11/15/13
Being in the public eye is not what it's cracked up to be--constantly being watched by paparatzi and fans or pundits and critics. God watches us from a very different vantage point, and I am so glad He does so from the love of a Father.
11/16/13
I especially liked the last stanza.

Great Job.

Keep writing.
11/16/13
Excellent thoughts and well expressed. We cannot always trust what we see and hear as truth. Yet we can know the truth found in Christ Jesus. Great job of pointing the reader to Him who knows all and directs our lives. Keep it up!
11/16/13
Ahhh, refreshingly beautiful!

I love your poem; so simple but so profound. Also very good rhymes (with the exception of the first 2 lines in the last stanza). This piece is like a catchy nursery rhyme that's fun to repeat.

Good job. Keep writing.
11/20/13
Great rhymes. I like the take on the topic, great work.