The Official Writing Challenge
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Nice use of synonyms.

How many should I count?
I usually try not to read other comments before I write mine to avoid being influenced. My eyes did drop down though. Yes you may have used a form of give quite a bit, but I saw it as a way to emphasize that God blesses us in so many ways. I often might be the first to suggest not repeating a word, especially in such a short piece, but there are times when repetition can be used as a literary tool. You did a nice job with it. I think you did a nice nob of pulling the topic in. The only red ink I might offer is to try to avoid passive verbs like is, get, was, etc. For example take your first line, you could do something like: The Scriptures show many ways we can give of ourselves.
That's not the perfect example, but I hope it shows what I mean. You Also transitioned smoothly between the juxtaposition. It is a reminder we all need from time to time. Keep writing, your words will touch many hearts.
07/23/13
All I can offer is that I truly was moved by your emphasis and love of Christ, and received it with a heart of gratitude. It makes my heart smile when I read entries that resonate truth, trust, and a refreshing nuance of "down to earth" words of love. Message accepted and well received, thank you!

God bless~