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This is good.

My only suggestion would have been to add a bit more that's not in the Biblical account. MOre of Rahab's feelings and thoughts.

Nice job, over all. I enjoy Biblical fiction and this was good.
This is a good entry. I enjoy reading these types of stories surrounding Biblical characters.

You might enjoy, if you haven't already, reading some of Francine Rivers novels. In fact, I think she has a novella about Rahab.
Anyway, it was a great read! Thanks for sharing it.
I really enjoyed your ending which read, "The scarlet cord, tied in a knot, hung fluttering in the winda symbol of redemption and the hope of deliverance." This really spoke to me about the hope we have of our future life with Christ.

I believe it you had invoked the feelings and experiences of Ruth, it would have made the story more original.

Keep up your writing.

I really enjoyed this. I've read a few recountings of this story this week and I think you did a great job of getting into the MC's thoughts. I felt drawn in and eager to keep reading, even though I knew the story.

Instead of using taglines like he said, use that space to show the reader what is going on. For example instead of this line: promised the spies. Since it's unlikely that both spies said the words before this, you might want to try something like this: The taller man nodded and he looked into her eyes as he realized that he would keep his word.

Overall, I think you did a great job. You kept my interest from beginning to end and still kept true to the story. Good job.
Interesting piece! Thanks for sharing the biblical in a big way.
Congratulations on ranking 8th in level one!
Congratulations on your 8th place in level one.
I've always liked this Bible story with its intrigue and the salvation of Rahab and her family at the end, and I enjoyed your version of it, too! :) HEARTY CONGRATULATIONS on ranking 8th in Level 1 with it! I look forward to reading more of your writing!