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What a heaert warming story. I was very engaged with the dialogue. Chills tingled through me - and that's a good sign.
Great story. I was brought into these lives and now I wonder how Lacey is doing.

Good writing!
Very real to the moment scenario. Nice writing. Watch tense shifts (they always get me too)
I'd like to start where your story ends. Your story had a perfect ending! Blake represented the true meaning of commitment. Yes, I agree. you need to watch out for tense changes. For ex: "swung opened,"
I clicked too soon.:-) Watch out for sentence fragments and misplaced or unnecessary comma usage. I'm guilty as well.:-) For ex:

(Not even the thousands of miles, that separated them.)

The above is not a complete sentence, and there's no need for a comma after miles.
A very heartwarming story that needs a sequel.
This is really sweet. I could picture it all. The beginning drew me in with the first sentence.

One thing I might suggest is too use more descriptive words. Really focus on showing the reader instead of telling. For example when describing how she looked you used the word perfect. Just by adding some details you can paint a picture for the reader. For example:
Her auburn hair was pulled back with tendrils framing her face while showcasing her cheekbones.

I did notice you did more showing as the story went on. Keep working at it, show vs tell is something most writers struggle with.

Though the ending was a tad predictable, I still think you did an outstanding job. Having the computer screen go black really highlighted the conflict. Outstanding job of incorporating the topic without being just another romance.
My favorite part of this was the ending. You did a beautiful job.
This is a lovely story. I, for one, was surprised and delighted by the ending. However, once the screen went blank, I figured it out, but still call it a surprise ending. ;)

I agree with the comma usage. There are way more than necessary.

When you use an ellipse ( . . . ) you need a space before, after and in between each dot (this is something I just learned!). And you might want to research the appropriate use of the ellipse just to make sure you are using them correctly. I think a comma would have worked fine in a few instances, or rewording might have been better. Try not to over use them (I love the ellipse, by the way!)

A few comments about the following section: Marry me, Lacey. He said as he gripped the receiver, in an attempt to steady the shaking of his hand.

There should be a comma after Lacey if you are continuing the sentence with "he said". However, a word of warning, while phrases like "he said", "she replied" or even "he bellowed" are common in good writing and accepted by many editors, faithwriter judges seem to prefer the omission of them. Simply stating the action of the speaker works in many cases. ("Come with me." Jason took her hand and drew her toward him.) However, I can't suggest an action for Blake in this scenario, because doing so changes the point of view. The rest of the story is told from Lacey's point of view up until Blake "took in a deep break and spoke".

You can tell this section from Lacey's point of view. Her experience in calling him, what she says to him between sobs, what she hears him say or do and how she responds. Keep the point of view on her and what she sees, hears, thinks, feels, etc.

You wrote a lovely story and I enjoyed reading it. Keep writing!

Congratulations on your HR placement! God Bless~