The Official Writing Challenge
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This is a great story. I felt the suspense and found myself holding my breath.

My only suggestion would be try to be more consistent with the tense you use. You jumped from future, past and present.

I liked your honesty in telling about your feelings. I'm also glad your got to go on your trip. God does work in wonderful mysterious ways!
What a neat recounting of changed expectations! I'm so glad that God spared your husband that you were eventually able to take your trip!
Oh my goodness, great job. I truly enjoyed it. God Bless you~
congrats on your win! Nice job...God Bless you~