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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Dropout (05/12/11)
Dropout
Gavin was a farmer, without land , he lost it all because a miriad of hash circumstances. The biggest of these was the ten year drought on eastern sea board. Then it was the down turn in livestock prices, due to the dueopily of the two majior suppper markets, pushing down price, below production cost.
So Gavin lost the family farm of five generations, also loosing his wife Beth and the kids, to greener pastures.

Gavin spent the next five locked up in his city apartement, only venturing out for food, he had one hobby listening to talk back radio, There was a compition to win an apple Ipad, Gavin comming from the out back, knew nothing of tecknolegy. He had to answer a question, Who was the first country to introduce paid postage stamps, being an old collector he knew the answer straight off, he answered Australia and wone the Ipad. It was deliverd to his apatement a week later, he took it out and charged it up and left it for a week he had also won free internet for a year.
He saw on the News that there were over 300,000 apps availble on just about everything, one particularly lonely day he picked up the ipad and begun to play around.
Search "friends" and a miriad of aplications came up, clicking the first with the most stars, was "Christ idate" it took the bushman a little while to fill out the questionare with his oversize farmer hands.
Then he hit search, and up came a hundred possibilities, he sent the first ten a short message of interest.
Two days later he had five replies, he corresponded with three of them, deciding on Bec same age simlar back ground. After a week isolated, lonely ,Gavin was no more, Bec and Gavin talked daily, on life and what mattered to them both as children of God.
They married one year after, the fateful lonely day Gavin gave social media a go.
Moral to this story step out and the world is not such a bad place after all.
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Verna Mull
05/19/11
Some good thoughts. spelling could use a little brush-up. Sometimes it helps to let it set after the first draft and make changes when you do the final. Rearranging some of this would probably improve a little Keep at writing. You will get better and better.
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
05/22/11
This is an interesting story with a nice message.

It is absolutely vital to proofread your entry or better yet let someone else proof it for you. The errors made it difficult to read.

You have a nice story here and it would be sad if people stopped reading because it needed to be proofread.

Keep writing, like the MC in your story, if you don't give up you will reap great rewards. Fixing spelling errors is the easy part of writing, you managed to come up with a nice story, which is the hard part.
diana kay
05/23/11
ahhh such a cute story :-) I like the fact that you took the POSITIVE aspects of social media and the internet as so many articles look at the dangers and problems.It was like a drop out drops in :-) The title is perfect!
Kristi Huseby
05/24/11
This was a cute story. I would echo the other comments. Keep writing.
Bonnie Bowden 
05/26/11
Good moral to the story. This was such a tender story, but I also had a difficult time reading it.

Proof reading and a good spell checker would have helped a lot, but with some practice and time I can see you developing into a good writer.