The Official Writing Challenge
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09/10/10
It was a beautiful and touching story. I have no doubts it was hard to tell, but done well. Keep heart you will one day yell four on Jorden's banks right before you make a hole in one. You will barely notice you will be enjoying the company too much.
This is such a heart- tugging story. I felt myself crying right along with you. Then you ended it with a beautiful vision of hope.
09/15/10
This was beautiful. I assume it's a true story - I'm so sorry for the death of your son. I especially like the last line of the next to last paragraph, "...grieving over a golf game that never was."

Aside from the touching topic, your writing style is very readable and written nicely. I enjoyed this!
Congratulations for placing in the top 10 of your level!