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Previous Challenge Entry (Level 1 – Beginner)
Topic: Shhh. (02/18/10)
“SHHH”, my friend said as we sat in that tree.
“Can you hear it, it’s coming, and soon we will see,
But we must be so quiet or we’ll not see at all,
And move we dare not, lest to the ground we fall”.

I used to go hunting both for ducks and for deer.
Through the rain and snow, there wasn’t much fear.
The thrill of the hunt and the conquer of game.
The stories we’d tell would give us some fame.

We took it quite seriously, those days from the past.
But the memories we made, forever should last.
From generation to generation we passed them along.
I write them in words and then maybe a song.

Relationships built and much mentoring done.
It was all wrapped up in these moments of fun.
How God gave us food for the winters so cold.
And we’d quiet our thoughts as the stories unfold.

I now find myself thinking back on those times.
When building relationships, wasn’t spending our dimes.
It was time spent together sharing words and a meal.
That kind of friendship makes the relationship real.

I learned as a child of a Savior divine.
Who speaks to his children with a voice so fine.
But He doesn’t yell out, and words He won’t scream.
But with that still small voice my soul He’d redeem.

He’d say “Come to Me and let Me be your guide.
I will never forsake you; I’ll never leave your side.”
“I will give you the guidance to live day by day.
And all you must do is quietly pray.”

“SHHH” is the answer that we all need to hear.
It will give us a measure to take away fear.
If we listen so quietly, most surely we’ll know.
That it’s only through Jesus we’ll find room to grow.
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Jan Ackerson
02/25/10
Lovely poem! It starts with a real-life situation and segues into an apt spiritual lesson.

Don't worry about the strange symbols; it sometimes happens and will not affect the judging. There's at least one thread in the forums about how to get rid of them.

Thanks for this well-written poem.
stanley Bednarz
02/26/10
What a nice poem. It's hard to tell what level I'm on when I read this as the first entry. Wow. As a hunter my dad taught me the meaning of "Shhh." This brings back memories.
Philippa Geaney 
02/26/10
Loved your poem. Love that still small voice! Well done.
R Quist
02/27/10
This is excellent. It gave me a deep sense of peace as I read it. VERY well done. Thanks!
Patricia Turner 
02/28/10
A great message wrapped up in an excellent poem!
Shann Hall-LochmannVanBennekom 
02/28/10
It's too bad you had the glitch, but the poem itself is simply beautiful. I'm sure the judges will be able to see through the strange letters and see the beauty of your words.

I hope when the challenge is done, you'll redo it and post it again without the glitches. It would be so sad if someone missed your beautiful words and sentiments because of a computer glitch.

It truly was brilliant.
David Pendleton
02/28/10
I really enjoyed your poem. I like poems that flow and rhyme simply, they are comfortable. Since the topic was one of comfort the style suited the topic perfectly for me.
Oni Mustapha Abu Bakar
03/03/10
Still managed to understand your message despite the errors. You did a nice job. Keep writing
stanley Bednarz
03/04/10
This is small consulation. But I still vividly remember on my third entry in "Beginner's," when I was told it was one of the best, even by Master writers. And it didn't even make the top 15 list on beginner's.

We are all one big family of faith, and I felt impressed to tell you: that as many hiccups as I had, you can do this. And your work will move forward.

Phillipians 1:6

Stan