The Official Writing Challenge
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01/22/10
Very cute! I loved it.
Interestingly written, a tad rough in a few patches, but the touch of humor helps to bring it out with some imagery, etc. A good short piece, thank you for sharing this! (and the title fits well)
01/23/10
I enjoyed this work of yours. It made me laugh but also take pause. I have surgery coming up, and I hope the surgeon does not make an Oops! Keep writing for Jesus.
Very creative. I was tickled about the Dentist beacause I was the assistant who did actually say "oops" during a surgical procedure. It NEVER happened again. :)
01/25/10
I love that the structure of each stanza was limerick-like...this is something we don't often see for Challenge entries, and quite refreshing.
This was wonderful. A couple of rough spots in structure, but the message was amazing. I love the creativity and the laugh it gave me.
This was wonderful. A couple of rough spots in structure, but the message was amazing. I love the creativity and the laugh it gave me.
This was wonderful. A couple of rough spots in structure, but the message was amazing. I love the creativity and the laugh it gave me.
This was wonderful. A couple of rough spots in structure, but the message was amazing. I love the creativity and the laugh it gave me.
The rhythm seems to come with ease. I enjoy writing poems but i'm not very good with meter. You've managed it quite nicely.
Really cute. Metre needs a little work, but a very creative way to approach the topic. Good entry.