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TITLE: Oops...I Slipped and Fell Again | Writing Challenge
By Verna Cole Mitchell
01/17/10

I told a little lie again;
I really didn’t mean to sin.

I wanted what another had
And wondered why that was so bad.

Just thinking only of myself,
I ate the whole cake on the shelf.

I spoke an unkind word or two;
That wasn’t what I’d hoped to do.

I gossiped of another’s fall,
Not sure that it was true at all.

I found myself puffed up with pride;
My arrogance I could not hide.

To do what’s right I did not choose;
My temper I did quickly lose.

I did not share with one in need,
‘Twas just another lost good deed.

No matter what excuse I made,
Each wrong act on my conscience weighed.

So many things did I regret,
I hadn’t planned to do them…yet…

It’s sad to say my will is weak,
And that’s the reason I must seek

Forgiveness from the Lord above,
Who still regards me with His love.

Then when I bow before His face,
He touches me with healing grace.

To keep from falling, when I try
In my own strength I can’t rely.

I need to stay close by His side
And let His Spirit be my guide

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Member	Date	Action
MarianeHolbrook	01/21/10
You packed so much into this little poem! Not only is it a study in precise rhyme and rhythm but it has such spiritual truths that make you want to linger and not rush through it. This would make a great laminated bookmark. It has everything it needs -spacing, length, width, everything! Well done! I love this entry!
BarbaraCuller	01/22/10
How true! Just like Paul lamented on how we tend to do what we don't want to do. Good job-this should be a winner!
CatrinaBradley	01/24/10
As I read this, with every stanza I thought "Guilty. Guilty. Guilty" What a great message! In Christ we are found "forgiven forgiven forgiven."
JimMcWhinnie	01/26/10
a solid, solid piece of poetry ... well done
ShannHall-LochmannVanBennekom	01/26/10
Such a talented writer! It was a wonderful testament to how we as humans keep messing up, but if we keep going to God, He keeps redeeming us. The only suggestion I would make was in the line: Each wrong act on my conscience weighed. I had to read it several times before I figured out act was a noun and not a verb. Maybe if you substituted blunder, or another noun, I might have understood the first time around. I might just be so tired, my brain is a few steps behind the rest of me. It was a very good poem. Thank you for sharing. Shann
CarolPenhorwood	01/26/10
Another master with words! Loved it!
CharlaDiehl	01/26/10
I enjoyed the light-hearted way you presented the failings of humans. . .and then, of course, what to do about it. Great message in this superbly written poem.
MonaPurvis	01/26/10
Splendid! It touched me so much today. It must be me you've written about. Class Act all the way. mona
CaroleRobishaw	01/26/10
There have already been so many good things said I don't know what to add. Well written!
SharlynGuthrie	01/26/10
Your poem has a wonderful flow to it, and the message is perfect for the topic.
PatriciaHerchenroether	01/27/10
Great flow, greater rhythm, and greatest message. I really liked this. Patty
PatriciaTurner	01/27/10
You word-smithed a masterful poem with a great message! To parrot another commenter: guilty, guilty, guilty - and like your mc, gratefully forgiven.
GeorgeParler	01/27/10
I loved this. Nice job. There were a couple of lines where I stumbled on the rhythm but not enough to distract from this piece at all. Well done.
JanAckerson	01/27/10
Did it...did it...did it... Excellent poem, simple and sweet.
RuthBrown	01/27/10
One can identify. Nice meaningful poem,Verna
ChelyRoach	01/27/10
Something we can all relate to. Wonderful poem...