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75 Word Mini Challenge Megans March

by Tim Pickl
03/20/08
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75 Word Mini Challenge – Megan’s March





Ultra-Short Story #1
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Megan stared at the stain, horrified.

"Why are you showing me this, Lord?" she desperately inquired.

“This is your heart, Megan.”

Instantly, Megan realized the ink-black stain she saw was sin.
She was overwhelmed by Guilt.

Then Shame.

She explained, sobbing, “Lord, I’ve been tryin’ to ‘make it right’
with You--and everyone else. What am I missing?
Please, help me—please…”

“Forgive your father…”

Megan woke up.

In tears, she reached for her cellphone.





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Ultra-Short Story #2
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Megan stared at the stain, horrified.

“I never thought of it that way,” she wondered aloud, wide-eyed
at the Easter Passion movie.

“Thought of what—that way?” John asked, mocking. He offered
Megan popcorn.

She refused. “I don’t feel like eating right now.”

John bragged, “More for me!” Crunching some kernels, he rudely
added, “What’d ya mean?”

I hate brothers, Megan thought.

She answered, “I never knew there was that much blood on
the Cross.”






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Also see:

75 Word Mini Challenge: Megan's March 2



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For the Ultra-Short Story “Mini Challenge” posted on FaithWriters here:

http://www.faithwriters.com/Boards/phpBB2/viewtopic.php?t=18749

Guidelines:
1. Write two ultra-short stories (no more than 75 words each)
2. They should be completely different in mood, tone, genre
3. Each should BEGIN with this sentence:

Megan stared at the stain, horrified.


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--bro. tim pickl
Thursday March 20, 2008 A.D.




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Holly Westefeld
22 Mar 2008
Both of these are challenging, and have lots of room for expansion.
Hanne Moon 
22 Mar 2008
You did such a good job with both of these! Some great writing here, and very thought-provoking!
Marita Vandertogt
21 Mar 2008
Loved these. They both speak such a powerful message. Well done.
Mo
21 Mar 2008
Wow. VERY well done!
Lyn Churchyard
21 Mar 2008
So much in so few words. Excellent Tim, excellent.
Loren T. Lowery
21 Mar 2008
Both, though different, are very timely, esp., at this time of year. Great job and message with so few words.
Jan Ackerson
20 Mar 2008
Wow, Tim--very moving, and even (in the 2nd one) a touch of humor, too. In the first one, I love the last line--you've said so much in just a few short words. Excellent!
Jodie Banner
20 Mar 2008
Wow, great job , Tim. You are truly a master of few words.
Karen Wilber
20 Mar 2008
I tip my hat, Tim. Thought provoking. I like the snapshot into Megan's life and thoughts that the second one provided. Makes me wonder how that realization will impact her later.
K. J. Cash
20 Mar 2008
The first story especially painted a picture for me and a reminder that we must forgive to be forgiven.

I'm going to watch The Passion for the first time at church this week. I've been afraid to see it until now. Your story confirms for me, that it is something I should see.
Joanney Uthe 
20 Mar 2008
I love the image that God gives her in the first story, and her reaction to it.

The second story is a timely story for Easter.

Great job.
Kristen Hester
20 Mar 2008
These are very moving. Great job. They pack a powerful punch.
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