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By Jack Taylor
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He glanced briefly at the unfinished cradle for the rabbi’s newborn, but the centurion was clear. Three crosses by sunrise. A special one for the murderer, Barabbas. The needs of life would have to wait.
The darkness hovered around him as he spent his strength under lamplight. The wood was heavy, resistant, as if fighting its purpose. As a nearby rooster crowed, he drove the iron spikes into the beam, whispering, “May Ha’Shem forgive me.” Instead of a trophy to nurture life, he had created a vehicle for death.
The first fingers of dawn crawled across hills and rooftops and probed the doorway to his shop. He laid aside his hammer, saying, “It is finished.”
He stretched his aching back, washed his blistered hands, and pondered the debt that had chained him to the centurion. He had borrowed money to buy lumber, but his son’s illness had demanded his resources, and he had fallen behind in his payments. His wife’s look of terror still haunted him as the soldiers had taken him away. Every beam built for Rome chained him to his failures.
The Roman arrived, helmet glistening, armor stained with dust. Caleb nodded toward the crosses leaning against the wall. The centurion examined them closely, grunting with approval. “Strong work,” he said.
Caleb motioned toward the special olive beams. “The one you told me to make with care.”
The centurion almost smiled. “Perfect. For this, your debt is settled.” He grasped Caleb’s shoulder. “It is finished, carpenter. Your debt is paid in full.”
The words dug deep like an arrow. Caleb bowed, feeling relief and shame together. The officer and his legionnaires loaded a cart and left, their hob-nailed sandals echoing on the street. ‘Finished.’ The word echoed in his mind like his hammer on the wood.
After washing up and stumbling to a vendor for tea and bread, his curiosity was aroused by the shouts and curses and wailing on a nearby street. He followed the crowd, heart pounding. Soldiers drove three men, sentenced to death. Caleb focused. Which one was Barabbas?
And then he saw Barabbas. Standing on a wall, looking down, unshackled and free. He looked back at the three. The man carrying the olive cross stumbled and fell under its weight. His face gazed up, bleeding, swollen, tortured. Caleb froze. Was it the healer from Nazareth? It was hard to tell, but his gut told him it was the man who had healed his blind brother at the pool.
The mob's noise echoed like thunder as the trio marched. The centurion’s crew did their work quickly at Golgotha, stretching out the rabbi’s healing hands and fastening them with the iron spikes that Caleb had secured. The hammer struck with familiar blows against the same beams his hands had formed.
Every blow fell against his own soul. And then the man prayed, “Father, forgive them…”
Caleb held his blistered hands out. Tears blurred his vision. “My hands did this,” he whispered. “Forgive me.”
The religious elite mocked and railed against the would-be Messiah. Women stood before him, weeping. As the hours passed, the sky darkened under an unnatural shadow, deeper than midnight. The earth held its breath. And then, a cry in the darkness, faint but clear. “It is finished.”
The words tore at him, staggering him as the ground shook beneath him. Three times, the phrase had been spoken-once by his own lips, once by the centurion, and now by the dying man. Each time it meant something more. The end of labor, the end of debt, and now, the end of life, or something deeper
Caleb fell to his knees, grasping the cracking stones, as the sky split with thunder.
Finished. The word ripped at his chest—the debt—his debt —paid in full. Not by anything he had done, not because of a soldier’s declaration, but because of a lifeless man on a cross he had shaped.
“It was my cross, my debt, my shame,” he blurted out.
As the storm raged upon Golgotha, Caleb’s heart knew what his hands had never dared to believe- grace had come to a carpenter, through a carpenter who was more than a carpenter.
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The first fingers of dawn crawled across hills and rooftops and probed the doorway. beautifully descriptive!
I especially like these words:
“Finished. The word ripped at his chest—the debt—his debt —paid in full. Not by anything he had done, not because of a soldier’s declaration, but because of a lifeless man on a cross he had shaped.
“It was my cross, my debt, my shame,” he blurted out.”
This story made me tear up.
A well-deserved 1st place in EC. It was so moving and captivated me from start to finish.
Well done!