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TITLE: Can You Feel My Pain | Previous Challenge Entry
By Verna Cole Mitchell
01/09/10
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I might be just a bit fanatical
For language that is ungrammatical.
It hurts my ears; indeed, that’s factual.
The pain I feel is truly actual.

For verb tense that has gone awry,
I’m seized by pangs and almost cry.
“I seen him when he took a fall;
I wish he hadn’t fell at all.”

For pronoun errors I must brace.
“This here—that there,” I cannot face.
With “Me and her will go,” I sigh.
I wince to hear “for you and I.”

A double negative can make
My eardrums and my head to ache.
Words “I ain’t got nobody’s” sad.
And even when they’re sung, they’re bad.

When subjects don’t with verbs agree,
The poor construction pierces me.
“Here is two apples”—how that bites!
And “It don’t matter” smarts by rights.

When grammar rules are thus abused,
I’m in distress for how they’re used.
I cannot help my strong reaction
And utter “Ow!” for each infraction.

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01/14/10

Very cute.

01/14/10

So true! Then add profanities as an adjective, and it its heart-wrenching!
I love this poem!

01/14/10

Oh, how funny!

Mariane Holbrook

01/14/10

How creative! I love this!

01/14/10

You must be a teacher to have taken this fun avenue to display the topic. Very entertaining--made me smile.

01/14/10

So, so good.

Anita van der Elst

01/15/10

My sentiments exactly!

01/15/10

Good fun material, but I hope you aren't one of those super pedantic types who would check a suicide note for spelling or syntax before you call any emergency services!!!

01/15/10

"Ain't that the truth?!"
Wonderfully written! I agree totally.

01/16/10

Well done, a most amusing poem.

Carol Penhorwood

01/16/10

Don't no nobody who would do that!

01/16/10

Awesome! Definitely an ow-worthy topic.

01/16/10

Clever, clever, clever! Love this EXPERTLY written poem!!

DANIEL MBAJIORGU

01/16/10

This writer ain't quite bad! And because s/he forgot to write us tautologies, me think s/he's not a bit fanatical but on the extreme end! A creative piece, brilliant, topical and didactic.

01/17/10

Every writer can relate to this! Love it!

01/18/10

Fantastic!! I'm certainly not perfect in the grammar department, but having a conversation with some people is enough to make me scream...thanks for venting my frustration so well!!

Joy Faire Stewart

01/18/10

Very creative and perfect title.

Catrina Bradley

01/18/10

Oh, yes, I feel your pain. Good fun.

01/18/10

Having 3 grandsons 16, 14, 13 and living in the South and attending public school...do I have to say more?
Sometimes, it's a foreign language.
Here's the thing, they are A students! But, their language is awful!
This is just so well written and very well done!

Mona

01/18/10

Oh, dear - Me hope I writings ain't cause you any pains! Really good! Really enjoyed -Thanks.

Colin

01/18/10

Fun piece! Makes me want to bone up on my grammar!

01/18/10

I do share your pain! Fun treatment of an irritating subject!

01/18/10

I snickered from beginning to end. This was priceless. Amen:)

01/18/10

So clever that it ought to be included in the front of all grammar books.

Carole Robishaw

01/20/10

OW! I hope I've avoided some of these. LOL all the way thru as I read.

01/21/10

Hey Verna, you may be slow on italics, but on grammar you rock! Cute and clever

01/21/10

I can relate to this SO well, Verna. Bad grammar hurts--always. Very well done!

01/21/10

Great poem. I enjoyed it very much!!! Congratulations on your wins on both your level and Editor's Choice!!!

01/21/10

Yay, Verna!!!

I love it...I know a lot of writers who will sympathize with this!

01/21/10

I had a feeling this would do well. It is excellent! You should try to get it published.

01/21/10

This is so delightful! Growing up in a home with teacher parents, we learned early on about proper grammar. So, like you, I cringe when I hear folks who don't "follow the rules." You already had so many comments, I wasn't planning to add to the congestion (^&^), but after reading your poem, I couldn't resist. Adding this to my favorites list.

01/26/10

Love the poem! I could almost visualize myself singing along in my head.

01/27/10

LOL . . . This is great! I love it. I like the rhythm and the flow. Congratulations.

Oh, wait a minute. This is why you get migraines when you read my writings. LOL

02/10/10

Verna, this is priceless. And it's very punny, too...doesn't "bite" at all!