The Official Writing Challenge
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Fun read! Good job. :-)
AMEN! I loved that last line, "If he is panicking, I have His permission to join in." Had me laughing out loud! And such a simple lesson to our culture today.
Thanks for sharing, and God bless,

Nice story, told with a light touch. I loved the ending.
Yes, fantastic ending! A great lesson to us all told with humor but cutting right to the heart of the matter. Great job!
Nice story - the title draws you right in! Great message woven throughout too. The only (tiny) thing I would suggest is getting rid of the last line. The one before it speaks for itself. Other than that, very well done!
This is absolutely perfect! Ready for the publisher, if you ask me. You did a beautiful job addressing the topic and pulling the reader right into the "coffin" with you! Just splendid writing---thanks!
Great story! The message comes shining through, keep our eyes upon Jesus!
What a delightful story! You drew me right into the scene and entertained me all the way through. The point at the end is absolutely brilliant, too. Love it!
Great job--an excellent example of how a "teaching" essay should be written--entertaining, real, and with a great kicker.
This was a great story that most of us with our active imaginations can relate to. One little "extra word" thing and a missing period short of perfection.

"The best way in to get in was to go feet first and wriggle down."
This is a great story! I was just on a similar boat yesterday so I could definitely picture the scene. I really loved the second to last line, but agree with the comment about the very last line. Maybe it could be worded differently?
Anyway, this is a wonderfully written "modern day parable." I thought about Jesus being on the boat sleeping while the disciples were so worried. Thanks for sharing!
Well written. I felt your claustrophobia and anxiety as I read this story, so I was grateful at the end to experience the peace as well. Good job.
You described this scenario so well I could picture and hear every part of the boat, especially your sleeping husband :)