The Official Writing Challenge
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03/05/16
Fibromyalgia is so complex and only those who have it (I was diagnosed 23 years ago)could understand the debilatating effects it could have on so many levels.

I related to this and I thank you for your honesty and for sharing with us.

Blessings~
03/06/16
Even without Fibromyalgia, my mind at times wanders through the Lord's prayer. Your piece is a good reminder to really think about and celebrate time with Christ.
You make some great points. I enjoyed your subtle sense of humor, I get it. What's even cooler, God gets it too. :)
03/06/16
I liked this quite a bit, especially the first two thirds or so. That was very compelling reading, and the choppy style fits the content perfectly.

After the first division, it got a bit more rambling. I realize that rambling was the entire point, but you went from addressing your reader to addressing God, and that was a bit disorienting. And I felt that the ending (feeling guilt about capitalization) was a odd one.

Each criticism in the above paragraph could easily be countered with "But that's the point--my condition makes my brain jump around." I get it--but the key would be to find a way to keep the reader compelled, too. The first part of your story did that very well.
03/07/16
I love the end results of your whirligig thoughts and stuttering mind. I identify with you always, and what you write never fails to make me chuckle. As Jan said, maybe you shouldn't have mentioned the article, as it's a no-no if you hope to be published. Other than that I enjoyed the story of you, being you, as always!
03/10/16
Congratulations, Judith, on your 5th place EC award. Your story really got the point across.
03/10/16
Creative and very candid work. I like your thought about this prayer becoming a mantra despite Jesus' lead-up to it.
Could I also caution against too much guilt about falling asleep in a prayer (providing it doesn't become a habit) for it may conversely indicate complete relaxation in God's acceptance and submission within his presence.
Yours 'heretically,'
Noel
03/11/16
Congrats!
Blessings~


P.S. "I agree with Noel's comment about relaxation in His presence...so true!"
03/11/16
Congratulations Judith, on a well deserved placing. More of the same please.
03/23/16
Delightful self dialogue dear!