The Official Writing Challenge
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You paint a vivid picture of the MC's home, and touch the reader's heart with her emotions.
The one thing you may want to consider is something our beloved Jan has been known to ask: How is the deceased MC relating this story in first person?
Marlene, What a stirring and heartfelt entry about the feeling of growing older.

Congratulations on your 1st place win in EC.
11/12/15
Wow, I can see why this won...you took us into the last memories and ebbing thoughts of a dying person! Congratulations on your well deserved win!
11/12/15
Congratulations, Marlene, on your 1st place EC award. I loved the word choices in your story; it really stirred my emotions. It does seem like the seasons of life pass by too quickly.

Seasons aren't normally capitalized, but I wondered if you did this for emphasis.
11/12/15
Brilliant, descriptive writing that fully deserves numero uno status. Well done.
11/12/15
Every descriptive thought and memory was so perfectly portrayed. Excellent! Congrats on your 1st place EC!