The Official Writing Challenge
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08/14/15
I like the sense of wonder and excitement that flows through this work, though a minor red ink point would be to suggest that you include a clear ellipsis - a row of spaced asterisks or just and extra line-gap - to finish the narrative and to more-clearly introduce your devotional application.
08/15/15
That was so touching. What a lovely way to tie in with the topic, and to bring out a devotional.
08/15/15
I liked the poem and the devotional wrapped into one. Parents are always ready, like a diaper wiping the table down.
08/15/15
I enjoyed this and could relate to much of what went on. I also enjoyed the devotional aspects.
Very clever use of topic and I loved how you wove in a great message. Great piece!
08/17/15
Clever! You really had the patience to let the story unfold at an even pace! This grew and grew until the end reveals a deep and well crafted message, all framed in a poem:)