The Official Writing Challenge
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This is amazing in its description of 'battles in heavenly places'. Your take on this Biblical account is both gripping and wonderful. Really loved reading this and its message spoke straight to my heart today. Thankyou.
You did a brilliant job of bringing this unfamiliar part of a very familiar story to life. I can totally imagine it happening just like that. It's such a small part of the Christmas Story, but also an important part.

My only red ink is your opening line is an incomplete sentence. A few years ago, I may not have noticed, but it did distract me just a tiny bit. All you would need to do to make it complete is change the period to a comma and put the third line after it.

Like I said, just a tiny bit of red ink. Once I got past it, I totally focused on your delightful story. The dialog was wonderful and really gave the characters depth.
Brilliant! I loved this most creative telling of the lead up to the annunciation. Well written.
Very very and very good story. Reminds me of a few famous christian story writers. No wonder your in masters.

Very graphic writing
I like how you build up the tension as you lay out the blocks of this story - before pouncing on us with a great opening/closing line.
Great writing.
This has been one of my great favourites in this chgallenge and its message has come back to me several times during the week. Wonderful writing. Many congrats - so well deserving of a high EC placing.
It's not so EC to be given HC, but you have both... Congratulations!