The Official Writing Challenge
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05/14/15
What a great testimony and beautiful story! You told it well.
I was so glad to read the ending to this,yet the whole piece spoke to my heart. Well written.
05/19/15
Oh wow. I actually have friends who's daughter had the atrial switch not more than a month ago. She's doing pretty well now. I'm glad your son and grandson are doing so well.

I hesitate to make any suggestions on such a personal story, but in the 4th paragraph, you use the word "bargain" four times in pretty quick succession. I'd try to reword some of that.

Great job with this.