The Official Writing Challenge
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I enjoyed the irony of the monster's scheme backfiring. The meter seemed a bit inconsistent in spots, but the overall effect was good.
02/20/15
Wow! I love your personification of this "Monster." Who among us hasn't gone a round with him? Your word choices are fantastic "skulked, toxic viruses, vilest" etc! Your final stanza brings this home. This well-planned and well-thought out poem is perfect in every way! -- This is a winner for me!
I really enjoyed this. Your descriptions were delightful and painted a great picture.
02/20/15
Very imaginative and accurate in the monster's deceit and in his discoveries. Well done.
02/20/15
Epic!

God bless~
Great description of the temptation thrust to us to envy. Keeps me mindful of the desperate need to suit up in the whole armor of God . . .

Thanks!
I like it! Great imagery.

'Eternally infected.'
02/24/15
You have described the green eyed monster to a tee. Beautifully written and expressed...
Congratulations on ranking 18 overall! Happy Dance!