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Wow - Simply brilliant! I loved the analogy and the symbolism in this fabulous entry.

I loved it, and what a joyous conclusion. Pure genius.

God bless~
Wonderful analogy in beautiful words--with a great message.

I had no idea where this was going until you revealed it. Well done. This was a very touching angle on the topic. I love when entries are Biblical without being super heavy. Thanks for sharing this with us.
You set the scene and very cleverly built the suspense with descriptions that still didn't reveal where you were taking us. But I loved the analogy as you tied in the scriptural truth. Great work.
WOW! What a brilliant poem and superb analogy. I agree with CD - pure genius!
I love this sort of poetry and you have written a masterpiece in my opinion.

I know that red ink helps both you and I to improve, but I really am struggling to find anything here to improve. The only thing I see is that, for me, it's not quite on topic.

Getting the short end of the stick implies doing everything right, being in the right place, but getting a disproportionate result.

The bulb eventually learnt a great Scriptural truth; but missed out because of himself rather than getting the short end of the stick.

Like I said though, thats only how I see it and the poem itself is brilliant.

"Out of the sight of old barn door" was an excellent line.

FANTASTIC! I came to FaithWriters from FanStory, which has a majority of poetry. This is one of the best I've read.

Your words were painted on the screen, not typed. What a beautiful image you created.

I haven't read the rest of the entries, but this is a winner.

This is simply marvelous in message, meter, flow, and poetic elements. The fear and hiding were tangible. All I can say is "Wow!"
Congratulations on ranking 8th in your level and 11 overall.