The Official Writing Challenge
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03/01/14
Wow - that was a sad story! So many emotions surged through my body, excellent writing, and on topic...but so sad. Sometimes that is what life is, so it had the earmarks of reality all over it.

Good job.

God bless~
03/01/14
By the way...I'm assuming it's "fiction" --I pray this was fiction.

God bless~
03/02/14
What a perfect title for this story! I like the subtle way you introduced your pregnancy and other "sub-topics" without interrupting the story's main focus.

Consider editing for punctuation, especially commas.

" I might miss if I got the mumps or the measles or the flu, but Eddie always..."
"He seemed careful how he handled me, and he was..."

You had a "Wow" ending that grabbed my heart.
03/02/14
Correction :-)
"I might miss if I got the mumps, measles, or the flu, but Eddie always seemed..."