The Official Writing Challenge
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Fantastic poem! Excellent work!

God bless~
A great poem. I love stanza that works and a story that leads you along. I loved your entry. Thank you.
I could feel this poem just clipping along and singing its song.

A job well done and thank you.

YHWH gave us His gift of the Sabbath - man has turned that precious gift into a burden.

I keep our Lord's Sabbath from Friday sundown through Saturday sundown. Why? Because He loves me enough to give me His memorial of Creation to stop all my nonsense and crawl into His Lap and rest in Him . . .
This has a nice pace and it flows smoothly as you read. Unlike many poems I read, it builds to nice peak at the very end, which takes excellent timing.

Nice job!
Just finished reading,KILLING JESUS. Your poem reminded me of many of the events in the book.

Great job! Great poem. Congratulations!
I really enjoyed the sing song quality of your poem but that was trumped by the spectacular way you wrapped it up! Well done and congratulations.