The Official Writing Challenge
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A unique twist at the end! Your story held my interest through to the last word.
Good, moving story. I was a little confused as to who was who, but I think that was the point. That was the twist...showing how the mom feels like a teen might, right? Very clever. Good job!
Nice ending -- the bad leads to the good.
This is excellent. Kids need to read things like this. I love how you put the mother's thoughts in language children will understand. I thought I was reading from a teen's POV at first, which was your intention, I believe. The twist was perfect, and very eye opening.

I relate to this personally. Your mom and I could be pals.
An amazingly well-done twist. I too had to go back and figure out who was REALLY journaling. Just excellent, from the title to the last word.
Incredible! An awesome job! This should be a must-read for teens; they often have no idea that their parents have feelings too. Good job. Blessings, Cheri