The Official Writing Challenge
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02/02/07
Oh, this is so moving and poignant! The characters, especially Oren, just came alive on the page. Great details.
Wonderful. Very descriptive, satisfying ending. I could feel everything Oren felt. Well done.
02/04/07
Very poignant article. Beautifully and sensitively written with a ton of lessons to be learned from it.
02/05/07
Such a sad story, but we are left with a glimmer of hope at the end when Oren shares his burden with his mother. This was wonderfully written, and the vivid descriptions really brought the story to life.
02/05/07
Sad, and wonderfully written, with just the right degree of hope at the end.
02/05/07
A great story. Only one hesitation goes with it, and that is that I am unsure as to whether or not dyslexia was known about in the time period you set. Because of that, I don't know if Oren's mom would have been so understanding. Beautiful writing, and you captured the emotions and characterization incredibly well.
02/05/07
Oh, I loved this. As others have said, the characters really came to life, especially Oren.
02/06/07
This is so well done. I could see the scene clearly and my heart ached for Oren. Thanks so much for sharing this
02/06/07
Great job in letting the reader feel the shame of this poor young man who struggles to read. Good use of "showing" rather than "telling."
02/07/07
I really could feel "Oren's Burden." This was very well done.
Charming is the word that comes to mind after I read this! Poor Oren had my sympathy for his daydreaming (Something I am far too eager to indulge myself in as well) I liked the conflict you showed between his attention and wanting to please his parents and understand at the same time. Very well done with something like this! ^_^
Great story. I have eye problems that lead to similar problems as dyslexia, and can identify with this story. Good job!
02/07/07
I REALLY enjoyed this. Excellent job. God bless.
02/08/07
Very touching story! I saw Oren as a very intelligent, perceptive, and imaginative boy who was suffering an unknown affiction. His pain was evident, too, and I sorrowed with him over the injustice of his treatment. Great job!