The Official Writing Challenge
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Date
02/21/25
You have told this story well, though it would read more smoothly in regular sentences instead of the poetic or blank verse setting that you have used.
Your simple, heartwarming story is very relatable and adds depth to the proverb you used for your introduction. Please consider including the Bible reference of that proverb to make your quote more complete.