The Official Writing Challenge
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Clearly the end of her servitude came and she was able to enjoy what life could offer with her parents. God blessed her too with marriage. Thanks for a simple yet profound story!
06/22/22
A fascinating and intriguing story. I enjoyed it.

I am not an accomplished writer myself, but would like to give this suggestion: The first paragraph could be more show, not tell. Possibly a little more action to draw people into the story.

Thanks for a good story!