The Official Writing Challenge
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08/06/16
Wow, that was an experience. I enjoyed the story. Perhaps more conversation or emotion would have been nice rather than a simple recounting of the experience. That is my problem often. I do a Joe Friday - "just the facts maam".
08/08/16
I believe in angels. I enjoyed your telling of this amazing experience.

I too think if you had included more dialogue it would have been better. Showing is often better than just telling.

I like your entry. Thanks for sharing.
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