The Official Writing Challenge
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04/29/17
This was well done and a wonderful read.

Blessings~
05/01/17
A very heartwarming story. Very good message. Good introduction. There were several miscues that took away from the flow of the story. The following could be corrected if you re-read several times before submitting: "Please be a kinder to him";"..,and getting honors in excellent in my opinion"; "can go back outside." Also, your lack of consistent sentence/paragraph spacing was distractive. Hope this helps. I really enjoyed your piece. God bless.